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My breath comes quick as I try to steer
Swallowing hard, push down fatalistic fear
Your name is the same, so go back again
We race, and chase, in cold gray rain

Falling forward down this hill
Flying – turning – weaving - still

I did not like what you just said
Slick words slide on pavement ahead
Pause and swerve, bump the curb; turn
Curt gesture and a glance that’s stern

Careening over puddles; hydroplane
Each doubt rises; argue; it’s insane

Life does not come with instant replay
Words and words but no meaning in what you say
You push and grasp; your point gets lost
Screech to stop, an inch from a post

Time halts; rain slips; dark gray clouds unseen
I glance at you; smile, hit the gas, the light’s green
©2003-2009 ~galaxie
:icongalaxie:

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Ever want to leave? I don't just mean location, either.

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:iconxburningmikex:
I really love this poem..VERY nice..+fav

I LOVE the imagery!

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-Mike

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:iconmachine-guts:
Wow very nice, this is excellent. Good work!

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"And now I see with eye serene, the very pulse of the Machine." -William Wordsworth
:iconfallenzero:
sometimes life stands still, though...
lets you relive moments over and over again...
it's worse than replay. humans are walking vcr's, permanently on record.

and i think we all want o leave sometime. anyone who says otherwise is selling someething.

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Now is not the time for name calling and blame sharing. Now is the time for dismembering the body and distributing the parts equally in dumpsters throughout the city.
:iconvitz:
i have nothin to say but its really great...
:iconveritactive:
Wow.
+fav

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Stagger down with ragged cloak and jagged dagger.
:iconareincarnation:
hmm. i don;t know what to make of this. i like it, but really don;t know why! :D (Big Grin) it isn;t that anything is wrong with it, it's just the structure. such structure is met with a feirce prejudice from me, but this does not seem forced, and actually comes off quaint

sorry, again, no critique from me today.. i am really being a pleb... but isn't it enough that i like it?

:( (Sad)

--
many cry for the dolphin, trapped in fishing nets.

but who cries for the tuna?

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